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Yippy! I wishpered to myself. The bus was here ohhhh! we didn't get to go. We had to waitten boring minutes for the slow bus that took for ages. Finally the bus is here.
Then we got to te ahuahu. When we started to climb the hill then and the others were at the top. After that we came to a cattle yard it was only a little way to the top. Yay!!! Were at the top of the pa of Te ahu ahu. I ran up the hill as fast as a goat to rawhitiroa. Woah!!! i'm at the top. Hone told us about the mountain te ahuahu and hone heke was the captain of te ahuahu and they had to move Hone heke's bone’s from porerowa to putai. Because people kept coming in and Building irrigation on porerowa.
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