sea and ocean thing link

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This is an activity we did using the Thinglink app. This is the second time I have made something using Thinglink so I hope someone will give me some feedback.

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Kaikohekohe movie night

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This is the movie that my brother and I made about motocross tips.

We enjoy Motocross because it is exciting so we made this movie about tips and safety.

First we made a story-board to say how we would film our movie and plan the different types of shots.  We used a gopro to film most of our movie.

To edit and make it look even better we used iMovie.

Our movie was chosen for the Kaikohekohe cluster movie night.

recount week5 term4

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Here is the recount I wrote  for an Asttle writing test in Week 4.  Our teacher marked all our recounts and gave us our scores. Mine came out at Level  3b   which is at the end of year standard for Year Five. I got the most points for language and sentence structure, and the worst points for not including enough ideas (my story was too short). After they were marked we helped each other improve them by reading each other’s recount and talking about them. We also used Revision Assistant to help edit each other’s story and Mrs B added some notes as well. Everyone in our room likes Revision Assistant because it’s easy to understand the marks/ notes that it puts on your writing and so it’s quick for us to go and do the fix-ups.We have to get the spelling, grammar and punctuation practically perfect before we are allowed to publish them here. I hope someone will give me some feedback.

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Here is my recount

Term 4 2016  recount sample A time with whanau:     `                                                               Name: Jayden

Title:  motorbike riding

Paragraph Plan: 1.getting gear 2.riding 3.finding a jump

Start Writing Here: “Yippee!” I yelled. On a sunny Sunday, Lowis (my cousin), Royston(my brother) and  we were going on the motorbikes because Lowis  wanted a ride.   First, we got our gear on as slow as sloths then started the powerful motorbikes. Lowis was using the Crf70f(Honda), Royston was using a 125 Yamaha and I was using a Crf80f (Honda). Then we were riding around the humongous block. Royston was shifting the sheep like a dog. Once Royston had finished, Lowis zoomed past as fast as a deer. “YIPPEE!” Lowis screamed. “Ow, ouch, ow, ouch!” Lowis fell over and he could not restart his bike but I help him sort it. Later in the day, lowis found a jump and rolled over it as slow as a snail then he was about to do another  jump and then… Aunty Tish came and roared as loud as a lion, “Come in! ”  “Ohh man!” Lowis moaned. In the end we all felt HAPPY and we had an ice block. It was nice and cold.  THE END

fish bone writing 2016

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This is an activity we did when we were learning how to find facts and put them in the right box on  a fishbone diagram. We are learning how to write a report about an animal which is native to China. We are learning about China at the moment because last week was Chinese language week and one of our classmates, Braeden, is half Chinese. I decided to put a photo of my animal on the background of my fishbone diagram and publish it just like that.

Something I think I have done well  is making sure I got the right facts in the right box.

Next time I think I could improve by writing more notes and fewer sentences. I need to just write down key words not whole sentences when I am making notes.

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